Dating Profile Fix: I want, I want, I want
May 7, 2009 by E. Foley · Comments Off
If you don’t re-read your profile before posting it, you’ll end up making mistakes that would make your 5th grade English teacher cringe.
Welcome to the Daily Fix, where we take snippets from real dating profiles and changes the names to protect the not-so-innocent.
Today’s subject is a 20-something woman we’ll call Zoe.
Before:
I want someone who is funny. I want someone who has ambitions and goals and always leaves room to better themselves. I want them to be driven and motivated that away we can benefit from one another. I want someone humble, and easy going but strong willed like myself. I want a friend, a companion and someone trust worthy and knows how to treat a woman as a lady with respect honor and dignity.
What This Says:
I want someone who is funny. I want someone who has ambitions and goals and always leaves room to better themselves. I want them to be driven and motivated that away we can benefit from one another. I want someone humble, and easy going but strong willed like myself. I want a friend, a companion and someone trust worthy and knows how to treat a woman as a lady with respect honor and dignity.
Seeing a trend here? Every sentence starts with “I want.“ Since this is her entire profile, it’s sending a pretty clear message. This is all about her wants.
The Fix:
Zoe needs to write about herself. The first paragraph of an online dating profile should always be about who YOU are. Then in the second paragraph you can get into the type of mate you want to find. Even then, she’ll want to spin it in a way that describes HIM without her needs involved.
You are a bit of a comedian: easy going and always smiling or cracking a joke. But on the other hand, you’ve got your life together. You’re driven and motivated and inspire those around you to be better people. People have joked that you’re as loyal as a dog, but to that, you just respond “Woof!” (That’s dog for “And?”) That’s my kind of guy – is that you?
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Dating Profile Fix: ALL CAPS NO PUNCTUATION MAN
April 24, 2009 by E. Foley · Comments Off
The internet has been around for a while. Those of us who have been keeping up with the Fashion Train know that we should never use ALL CAPS when typing. We also know to use punctuation. But sadly, not everyone is on the train…
Welcome to the Daily Fix, where we take snippets from real dating profiles and changes the names to protect the not-so-innocent.
Today’s subject is a barely legal male we’ll call Quinn.
Before:
I JUST LOOKIN FOR SOMEONE WHO CAN KEEP IT REAL BEST BELIEVE IM GOING KEEP IT REAL I LIKE AN OUT GOING PERSON AND SOMEBOBY WHO LIKE HAVING FUN AND KNOW WHAT TEY WANT IN LIFE AND SOMEONE OF GOT A GOOD HEAD ON THEIR SHOULDER…
What This Says:
It’s taken me several read-throughs to figure it out. I can’t focus on ALL CAPS to be able to read what he’s saying. Let me type it out for you all normal:
I just lookin for someone who can keep it real best believe Im going to keep it real i like an out going person and someboby who like having fun and know what tey want in life and someone of got a good head on their shoulder.
You know, that still doesn’t make much more sense. Perhaps I am too old to understand the lingo. (Is 30 old?)
The Fix:
Quinn’s profile could at least stand to have proper spelling, grammar, and punctuation. He can keep his hip lingo (since he probably wants a girl who shares the same vibe).
I’m looking for someone who can keep it real. Believe me that I’m going to keep it real, too. I like an outgoing girl who likes to have fun, but also knows what she wants in life. She’s a party girl with her head on her shoulders.
Still Quinn, just much easier to read.
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