Dating Profile Fix: Not-so-Thrilling Thrill Seeker
One of the age old snippets of advice for writing is: “Don’t tell – show.” This advice can go a long way in writing your best online dating profile.
Welcome to the Daily Fix, where we take snippets from real dating profiles and changes the names to protect the not-so-innocent.
Today’s subject is a 40-something man we’ll call Warren.
Before:
I can sometimes be a thrill seeker and enjoy traveling and trying new things.
What This Says:
Not much. Let’s just take “thrill seeker” as an example. That could mean any number of things:
- He likes roller coasters.
- He likes to eat weird foods like that Fear Factor stuff.
- He likes to drive his car way faster than the speed limit.
- He skydives on the weekends.
- He engages in lots of unprotected sex.
I’m sure there are thousands of other “thrill seeker” activities. Some of them are fun, some are not so fun (or legal). What Warren needs to do here is clarify exactly what kind of thrills he likes. This gets women engaged in his story – which is exactly what he wants!
The Fix:
You could call me a thrill seeker – or maybe just a speed seeker. I’m good with my car (no tickets, Mom!) but I’m a sucker for a great roller coaster. I love the old wooden roller coasters, but am enamored with the technology behind all the newest thrill rides. I could spend a whole day at the theme park just riding coasters!
That says a LOT more than just “I’m a thrill seeker.” Women who like roller coasters will be clicking the “Email me!” button. Women who would have moved on because they had a “thrill seeker” of an unsafe variety in the past will know exactly what kind of thrills make Warren happy. Win-win!
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