Dating Profile Fix: I want, I want, I want
If you don’t re-read your profile before posting it, you’ll end up making mistakes that would make your 5th grade English teacher cringe.
Welcome to the Daily Fix, where we take snippets from real dating profiles and changes the names to protect the not-so-innocent.
Today’s subject is a 20-something woman we’ll call Zoe.
Before:
I want someone who is funny. I want someone who has ambitions and goals and always leaves room to better themselves. I want them to be driven and motivated that away we can benefit from one another. I want someone humble, and easy going but strong willed like myself. I want a friend, a companion and someone trust worthy and knows how to treat a woman as a lady with respect honor and dignity.
What This Says:
I want someone who is funny. I want someone who has ambitions and goals and always leaves room to better themselves. I want them to be driven and motivated that away we can benefit from one another. I want someone humble, and easy going but strong willed like myself. I want a friend, a companion and someone trust worthy and knows how to treat a woman as a lady with respect honor and dignity.
Seeing a trend here? Every sentence starts with “I want.“ Since this is her entire profile, it’s sending a pretty clear message. This is all about her wants.
The Fix:
Zoe needs to write about herself. The first paragraph of an online dating profile should always be about who YOU are. Then in the second paragraph you can get into the type of mate you want to find. Even then, she’ll want to spin it in a way that describes HIM without her needs involved.
You are a bit of a comedian: easy going and always smiling or cracking a joke. But on the other hand, you’ve got your life together. You’re driven and motivated and inspire those around you to be better people. People have joked that you’re as loyal as a dog, but to that, you just respond “Woof!” (That’s dog for “And?”) That’s my kind of guy – is that you?
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