Dating Profile Fix: From Laundry List to Sexy Story
It may be tempting to write a list of the things you like in your online dating profile, but what really draws people in is a STORY. What’s the tale of your life?
Welcome to the Daily Fix, where we take snippets from real dating profiles and changes the names to protect the not-so-innocent.
Our subject today is a 20-something lady who we’ll call Patty.
Before:
I DO:
* prefer coke over pepsi…but I will drink both..
* enjoy camping & 4-wheeling with people I love to be with.
* wish I will be happy, and wish everyone good health.
* like to dance on occasion and being silly.
* horsing around/wrestling IS fun! lol
This Is…
There’s nothing wrong with this. It’s good information. It’s positive. It’s cute and friendly. But it could be better!
The Fix:
Patty can incorporate all of these into a story and really draw in her readers.
Getting muddy while 4-wheeling with friends is an awesome way to spend a weekend. Or camping – maybe camping!! Bring on the s’mores and dancing like fools around a campfire under the stars. Crack open a can of Coke (or Pepsi, I’m not too picky) and let’s see who can burp the loudest. Don’t hold back because I’m a girl. I will kick your butt!
Which version of Patty would you email if you had to choose?
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